The Extreme Jump.
It was almost time to begin the biggest jump competition ever. As Bella sat at the top of the humongous ramp. She looked down at the deep, deep drop below and the dusty, rocky ground surrounding the ramp. Her heart was pounding with fear because no one in the world had ever attempted to do this stunt.
All around her the dirt bike tracks were dusty and hot . All around her there were people staring at her. All around her there were riders who already knew that Bella would beat them today. But Bella didn’t know how they were feeling. She looked back at them and felt nervous. She wasn’t nervous about the other riders. All she was thinking about was how she was going to land the bike after her stunt.
The Judges counted down from 5,4,3,2,1 GO! Then Bella blazed off like a cheetah. She zoomed down the deep drop below and came up to the top of the ramp…. Then she flew up into the sky. Bella couldn’t hear any thing at all except for the screaming of her engine. She did her big stunt in the air and started to come back down. She was scared because she still wasn’t sure how she will land.
It felt like she was coming down slowly. Then the bike landed safely. Bella yelled with excitement and saw her mum and family cheering. She had won the Extreme Jump Challenge and was world champion!
It was almost time to begin the biggest jump competition ever. As Bella sat at the top of the humongous ramp. She looked down at the deep, deep drop below and the dusty, rocky ground surrounding the ramp. Her heart was pounding with fear because no one in the world had ever attempted to do this stunt.
All around her the dirt bike tracks were dusty and hot . All around her there were people staring at her. All around her there were riders who already knew that Bella would beat them today. But Bella didn’t know how they were feeling. She looked back at them and felt nervous. She wasn’t nervous about the other riders. All she was thinking about was how she was going to land the bike after her stunt.
The Judges counted down from 5,4,3,2,1 GO! Then Bella blazed off like a cheetah. She zoomed down the deep drop below and came up to the top of the ramp…. Then she flew up into the sky. Bella couldn’t hear any thing at all except for the screaming of her engine. She did her big stunt in the air and started to come back down. She was scared because she still wasn’t sure how she will land.
It felt like she was coming down slowly. Then the bike landed safely. Bella yelled with excitement and saw her mum and family cheering. She had won the Extreme Jump Challenge and was world champion!
COOL!!!!
ReplyDeleteI love your blog spot Bella it is very interesting looking through you blog spot because you have some amazing writing that can catch the readers attention!
I think that probably next time you could put up a picture. But anyways what an awesome writing you have I loved the vocabulary good descriptive words :)
Illy:)
Hey Bella this was are really good story. I enjoyed it so much that I wanted to post it on my blog. It hooked me in to do really good in my writing and stuff.
ReplyDeleteHi Bella I was just reading your story, it was AMAZING i really enjoyed it and i like the way you used many different punctuation and interesting words to make your story catch an audience attention like me.
ReplyDeleteKeep up all the great work.
Faith ;)